Sunday, March 14, 2010

Crass Transit : A Sunday Haiku (UPDATED)


trains and trains and trains
people bags and noisome odors
derail, impale me

Pheewrap said...

Line two should only have seven syllables.

March 14, 2010 8:49 PM
He's right. This haiku, like its topic, is intrinsically flawed.
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  1. PheewrapMarch 14, 2010 at 8:49 PM

    Line two should only have seven syllables.

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